| From: | Bull <chaos@*****.COM> |
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| Subject: | Re: Cleveland, 1st draft... (part 1) |
| Date: | Tue, 4 Mar 1997 08:09:01 -0500 |
>Hey,
>
>I've only had time to scan through your text. Overall, I thought you did
>a good job.
>
Thanks
>However, just a suggestion on my part here, but could you put in an
>introduction or something to summarize Cleveland. I mean, from reading
>your text, I haven't really got a real good feel about the overall
>atmosphere there.
>
It's still in the works... Tehre's a good deal that needs to be done on it
still...
Am intro is one of the things that needs written yet..:) There's actually
four or five people on this end writing the file... But we're still
waiting for the otehrs to finish their sections... They don't really have
e-mail access, so they aren't on the list...
>And while we're at it, perhaps it would be better if there were less
>comments compared to the amount of text. I mean, what you have is good,
>but a higher text to comments ratio would be appreciated.
>
Actially, most of the text will hopefully be expanded... I don't like only
having a cuple sentences describing things...
And a lot of the qoutes are included to hopefully provide insights into
things, as well possible plot hooks and such.
>Hope you don't take this as a flame.
>
Not at all... I can take constructive criticism,... That;s what I put the
early draft up here for...:)
Comments are welcomed and encouraged...:)
Bull
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