|From:||Joe McRage gburus@***.univ.szczecin.pl|
|Subject:||About story Dvixen helped me on|
|Date:||Thu, 16 Nov 2000 11:25:10 +0100 (MET)|
> ...so was I... or ...My parents were rather poor, (enter a description
> of how life was scratched out by the parents, maybe his thoughts about
> what they did, since this is the voice you are writing in)...
> Personally, I'm fond of the second option. :D
hmm...., What do you think, how much should I enter here (how many phrases)?
> > he was mage and tall and powerfully build elf (later he
> ...was a mage... a rephrasing of this to: ...I was told the tall and
> powerful elf was a mage... Maybe?
Actually, the Troll was a mage, not the elf.
And she comes down to me
And she offers me sleep
Under her black wings