From: | James Dening james@************.force9.co.uk |
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Subject: | Delurk..... (was Re: The beginning of my story) |
Date: | Thu, 29 Jul 1999 09:46:51 +0100 |
>>Arcology when it was shutdown and we remained there until the situation
>>inside was resolved. There is one section that I believe you would be
>>extremely interested in publishing. It came about a year after the
>>Arcology shut down. I can transfer the files to you, if you want to
>>read all about it..." Her voice trailed off.
>(Tay-Dor's right. At this stage it's too dangerous to say "until the
>situation inside was resolved". If you leave it vague so that it's
>possible they stayed in until it all finished or that they got out
>while it was going on, you SHOULD be all right).
<Delurk> Well, how about:
"Because," she calmly replied, "he and I were inside the Renraku
Arcology right up until....well, you know the rest, don't you?"
or
"Because," she calmly replied, "he and I were inside the Renraku
Arcology right up until....well...*it* happened."
That way, it keeps the reader in suspense, and allows for a definite
end to the Arc. situation, *OR* a bug city apocalypse scenario.
James.
<\Delurk>