From:	Strago strago@***.com
Subject:	The New Guy
Date:	Sun, 06 Feb 2000 03:38:38 -0500

CulIenTrey@***.com wrote:

> Well, I'm new on the list, and none of you probably know me. I go by the
> handle Azazael. I'm big on Shadowrun, big on fiction, and big on writing.
> Which, of course, led to my subscription to this list. I hope I'll meet all
> your standards. I'm glad to be aboard.
> <SNIP STORY>

MY GOD!!!!! The only thing I'd say besides that is to erase the last line. Ending
it with "But Joey, my Joey--!" would be much more powerful, IMO, than giving a
small description of the fate we all know is coming. But other than that, very
good. Very much something to think about. I likey.

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--Strago

In Italy for thirty years under the Borgias they had warfare, terror, murder,
bloodshed - they produced Michelangelo, Leonardo da Vinci and the Renaissance. In
Switzerland they had brotherly
love, five hundred years of democracy and peace, and what did they produce? The
cuckoo clock!
-Orson Welles

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