| From: | lickme@****.es.co.nz lickme@****.es.co.nz |
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| Subject: | Joe Schmuck: Chapter 1 - 07/07 |
| Date: | Tue, 23 May 2000 13:22:41 GMT |
> lot. :) See if you can match it. :)
Heh, not a chance of me keeping up. It's really hard to write quickly when you
type with your toes ;)
<snip>
> Well, that's tough. See, I find putting words like that (can't remember the
> exact term for them) in stories a hideous practise. :) I'd have never ended
> up in a situation like that.
..
> Well, sorry. All I can suggest is to change "Blam blam" and
"Click" to
> descriptive words, rather than representative ones, if you follow me. But
> that might screw with the effect you're looking for in which case I suggest
> you ignore me completely. :)
Thanks for the advice. I guess that's something I'll have to work on, maybe
I'll go back and try to clean it up. I figure theres a limited number of
ways you can describe small arms fire and combat. It must be terrible for
action writers to be always using the same stuff over and over...
It deserves more of my attention I suppose.
> (If you hadn't noticed, the narrator in my
> story used non-standard grammar and phrasing on a number of occasions,
> because it suited the effect I was trying to create and I'm a great believer
> in style.)
Nope, hadn't noticed. The only "Grammar" I know is my fathers mother ;) My
spelling and grammar checking is Billy G's fault. I'm a great believer in
ignorance
:)
